Ode To Polaroid Camera
Dear Polaroid Camera
Do you remember when I first saw you? It was at an electronic store and you were just standing there, shining at the show window. I felt like you were waving your hand toward me wanting me to take your hand. For a moment I hesitated, since I weren’t really sure of you. I didn’t know if you were the one that would suit me, but my instincts told me “go for it”. To tell you the truth, the thing I was trying to find weren’t you. I wanted something skinnier, prettier, and worked faster. I wanted something that was new and nice. But you just hooked me up and wouldn’t let my thoughts fall away from you. Do you think that I regret that decision? No way! I still like you and I never really regretted the decision I made on that day. In fact I feel proud of myself that I chose you and not something else. Come to think of it, other ones don’t have humane characters and they are like if they are cold blooded. They don’t even make mistakes that you do sometimes and they erase their memories too easily. Memories should be kept like you not erased because it is not pretty. It should be kept no matter what, just like you do. Also they just quickly disappear after few months if no one looks for it, unlike you who are always there.
Afterwards, you were always with me where I went. You were always there when I was sad, when I was disappointed, when I was happy, when I was excited. I was never alone because you were always there with me and we could leave lots of memories to look back later on because I was with you and not alone. Even though you are big I liked you. Even though you are not fancy and act in an old fashioned way I liked you. Even though you might attract people’s attention because of your looks I liked you. That’s why I keep you with me always where I go. That’s why I show you to my friends and make memory together. That’s why I always buy something to decorate you.
I know that sometimes you were left alone in the closet instead of being taken with me to new places I went to. You might have not liked being left, since you are not used to it. You might have felt depresssed and sad and maybe even felt that nobody wanted you. However, I just want you to know that you are my best friend and I will be always there, like you are always there for me. You are my best friend and I want to thank you for helping me keep my precious memories all along this time. I hope that you feel the same with me and once again make indelible memories with you.
Your sincerely
Ann Lee
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답글삭제It was IN an ELECTONICS store, and you were just WAITING there, shining IN the SHOWROOM window. I felt like you were waving your hand TOWARDS me, INVITING me to take your hand. For a moment, I hesitated, since I WASN’T really sure of you. I didn’t know if you were the one that would suit me, but my instincts told me “go for it.”
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To tell you the truth, the thing I was trying to find WASN’T EVEN you. I wanted something skinnier, prettier, THAT worked faster. I wanted something that was new and nice. But you (DELETE) hooked me (DELETE) and wouldn’t let my thoughts fall away from you. Do you think that I regret that decision? No way! I still like you and I never really regretted the decision I made that day AT ALL. In fact, I feel proud of myself that I chose you and not something else. Come to think of it, THE other CAMERAS don’t have YOUR humane CHARACTERISTICS, and COMPARED TO YOU IT’S AS IF they are cold blooded. They don’t make THE BEAUTIFUL mistakes that you SOMETIMES do, and they erase their memories too easily. Memories should be kept, EVEN IF THEY AREN’T ALWAYS pretty. THEY should be HELD ON TO, no matter what (DELETE). (DELETE) IF NO ONE EXAMINES THEM, they just quickly disappear AND FADE after A few months. BUT NOT YOU. YOU are always there.
After PURCHASING YOU, you were always with me WHEREVER I went. You were always there when I was sad, when I was disappointed, when I was happy, and when I was excited. I was never alone because you were always there with me, and we could leave PLENTY OF memories to look back ON later (DELETE), because I was with you and not alone. Even though you are big I LIKE you. Even though you are not fancy and act in an old fashioned way. I LIKE you. Even though you might attract people’s attention because of your AWKWARD looks, I ACCEPTED you. That’s why I keep you with me EVERYWHERE I go. That’s why I show you to my friends, and make memories THROUGH YOU. That’s why I always buy something to decorate you.
I know that sometimes you ARE left alone in the closet instead of being taken with me to new places (DELETE). You might have not liked being left, since you are not used to it. You might ALSO FEEL depressed and sad, and maybe even FEEL that nobody WANTS you. However, I just want you to know that you are my best friend, and I will be always there, like you are always there for me. You are my best friend, and I want to thank you for helping me keep my precious memories ALIVE all (DELETE) this time. I hope that you feel the same with me, and once again WE CAN SHARE indelible memories TOGETHER.
YOURS Sincerely,
Ann Lee
Very nice. The look and feel of your post truly matches the content, and I can see you put some effort and thought into this. I'm happy you chose a unique object to personify, and you do a great job politicizing the camera. I never thought about Polaroids like this before.
답글삭제In terms of mechanics, you do have some things to iron out. Lot's of grammar to work on - especially with verb tenses. Simple things that you can correct with a bit more quality control and quality inspection. Spend more time proofreading. Microsoft Word should show you these errors if you use it.
Other then that, I think you could have touched on the photosynthesis process that Polaroids go through as the picture develops. It's kind of exciting to watch as the image fades into being - a very poetic process full of anticipation that you could have spent more time describing.
Good work here.